A few things:
- In #2 I would mention the word fiat, or at least state your definition of currency. Bitcoin isn't a fiat currency and probably never will be. google define:currency and you get:
"Noun
1. A system of money in general use in a particular country.
2. The fact or quality of being generally accepted or in use."
Bitcoin isn't #1, but it is #2 - In #5, I would define what you mean when talking about Bitcoin. Yes, Bitcoin protocol is secure, but exchanges aren't. Unfortunately, for the average person, exchanges are a necessary evil to use Bitcoin, so in a way, they are a bit part of Bitcoin.
- #6 could be supported with a picture of Richard Branson when he setup his first company.
I'd suggest a bit of formatting in there to. Make you title bold, maybe italicize the date and name or something. A bit of formatting to make the points as a whole stand out (indent them a bit) and individual points more defined (e.g. make the numbers bold) and you're missing a line space or 2 on the last couple of points.