I'd give you a 2/10 , but if you're serious try this..
https://www.smartinsights.com/digital-marketing-strategy/online-value-proposition/start-with-why-creating-a-value-proposition-with-the-golden-circle-model/
Topic: Need your feedback for our intro !!! (Read 230 times)
This is a copied, unoriginal, crappy version of one of the idea of independent hi-tech jurisdictions in the high seas using latest gadgets and technology. Something like the seastead idea that was a kind of dream for the young millionaires in crytpo and elsewhere. Theymos talked about the idea here:
We should build a seastead.
This has been re-hashed multiple times with the similar language and claims. In fact, those old ideas were in fact way more authentic due to the novelty. After the ICO boom, people have sold almost every kind of conceivable dream purely via language. Without some kind of work to show or proof of having the requisite expertise to make things happen, these "introductions" only sound ridiculous. Someone or the other is coming up with one idea everyday. The purpose in the end is same, to sell some kind of limited memberships with huge discounts.
We should build a seastead.
This has been re-hashed multiple times with the similar language and claims. In fact, those old ideas were in fact way more authentic due to the novelty. After the ICO boom, people have sold almost every kind of conceivable dream purely via language. Without some kind of work to show or proof of having the requisite expertise to make things happen, these "introductions" only sound ridiculous. Someone or the other is coming up with one idea everyday. The purpose in the end is same, to sell some kind of limited memberships with huge discounts.
It's too good to be true just like what other scam projects are offering you are selling a dream or a genie in a lamp where all your wishes will come true, but very interesting I would like to see your project and we'll check if it will really deliver all the promise you posted in your introduction, but people here good in finding holes so beware.
Your intro is overambitious with far too many buzzwords... Robots, drones, intelligent...
Why not keep it simple and avoid following the same type of tagline used by thousands of failed ICOs.
People are not looking to get burned again, and will avoid investing in anything that seems even vaguely familiar now.
Why not keep it simple and avoid following the same type of tagline used by thousands of failed ICOs.
People are not looking to get burned again, and will avoid investing in anything that seems even vaguely familiar now.
Imagine yourself living in a beautiful smart home with mobile walls, interior gardens, pools, clean healthy air and intelligent security.
Built by giant robotic drones and heated by solar powered data furnaces.
Built by giant robotic drones and heated by solar powered data furnaces.
Am i dreaming?
We are indeed progressing when it comes to tech and innovation but these bolded words are still far to reality. Lots of projects in the past or even up to now does really have this kind of plans or goals but totally failed up.
Do you know on how big the money would really be needed for this kind of idea? Im sure you dont have even a clue.
You wont find even a single investor with this and same as said above you didnt even have the time or consider to put up at least some glimpse of your roadmap or things which shows the whole concept
on the thing that your talking about on here.
1000 investors??? Seed Rounds are supposed to be a limited number of people involved for that investment and 1000 investors is too much for it to be called a seed round since you are asking for a lot of investors to join in your company. What you are looking for right now is sort of a crowdfunding campaign where you are looking for several people and potential first customers depending on what type of business you have. 1,000 members controlling the company is too much and I don't think it will fit in your system depending on how you manage that number. Also for your sales pitch I don't think you will catch someone with just words without backing it up with illustrations and a clear road map, right now you just sound like a scammer who just created a new HYIP site.
Too promising, I think using robots is not bad but the profit and gain is to OP and I mean not very realistic. What is your product and ideas I can't seem to look at it. Technology is surely booming but what are you selling?
From what I see you want to sell Science Fiction novels. What you propose is very difficult (or maybe still impossible) to implement and it'll have a huge cost. Not feasible for most humans yet (not talking only about the people in this forum).
Also, unless you have something working, you are selling a dream. And unless you represent a reputable company backed by even more reputable companies, your proposal is closer to a scam than to real business.
So the backing must be stated.
Also in such deployments the security against hack is important to be discussed.
Also, unless you have something working, you are selling a dream. And unless you represent a reputable company backed by even more reputable companies, your proposal is closer to a scam than to real business.
So the backing must be stated.
Also in such deployments the security against hack is important to be discussed.
Exactly what is stated above is where I stand too. I read your post about 5 times and would give it a 1/5. You need to incorporate clarity into your selling points. You have 8 seconds (average attention span) to sell it after that everything goes out the window.
Hi Bitcointalk Community,
I need your valued opinions about our intro for our "Seed Round". What do you think about it? Trying to figure out, if we are missing anything.
Q: Since when... has a blockchain token been supported
by an $11 Trillion Dollar World Industry?
A: Since now…
Imagine yourself living in a beautiful smart home with mobile walls, interior gardens, pools, clean healthy air and intelligent security.
Built by giant robotic drones and heated by solar powered data furnaces.
A home that pays your bills while you sleep.
No worries about fires, hurricanes, water damage or theft.
Groceries and sightseeing trips may be taken by air.
An industry of robots, working day and night, creating utility.
Become a member and live the dream with us.
Click HERE (Limited Seed Round)
The first 1000 Members get a huge 30% bonus!
Pure demand driven utility with a decades long growth horizon.
An entire industry driving down the cost of housing while protecting our environment.
Utility?
Robots never sleep...
Memberships are limited.
(click Here to buy memberships)
I need your valued opinions about our intro for our "Seed Round". What do you think about it? Trying to figure out, if we are missing anything.
Q: Since when... has a blockchain token been supported
by an $11 Trillion Dollar World Industry?
A: Since now…
Imagine yourself living in a beautiful smart home with mobile walls, interior gardens, pools, clean healthy air and intelligent security.
Built by giant robotic drones and heated by solar powered data furnaces.
A home that pays your bills while you sleep.
No worries about fires, hurricanes, water damage or theft.
Groceries and sightseeing trips may be taken by air.
An industry of robots, working day and night, creating utility.
Become a member and live the dream with us.
Click HERE (Limited Seed Round)
The first 1000 Members get a huge 30% bonus!
Pure demand driven utility with a decades long growth horizon.
An entire industry driving down the cost of housing while protecting our environment.
Utility?
Robots never sleep...
Memberships are limited.
(click Here to buy memberships)
I'd give you a 3/10
From what I see you want to sell Science Fiction novels. What you propose is very difficult (or maybe still impossible) to implement and it'll have a huge cost. Not feasible for most humans yet (not talking only about the people in this forum).
Also, unless you have something working, you are selling a dream. And unless you represent a reputable company backed by even more reputable companies, your proposal is closer to a scam than to real business.
So the backing must be stated.
Also in such deployments the security against hack is important to be discussed.
Also, unless you have something working, you are selling a dream. And unless you represent a reputable company backed by even more reputable companies, your proposal is closer to a scam than to real business.
So the backing must be stated.
Also in such deployments the security against hack is important to be discussed.
Hi Bitcointalk Community,
I need your valued opinions about our intro for our "Seed Round". What do you think about it? Trying to figure out, if we are missing anything.
Q: Since when... has a blockchain token been supported
by an $11 Trillion Dollar World Industry?
A: Since now…
Imagine yourself living in a beautiful smart home with mobile walls, interior gardens, pools, clean healthy air and intelligent security.
Built by giant robotic drones and heated by solar powered data furnaces.
A home that pays your bills while you sleep.
No worries about fires, hurricanes, water damage or theft.
Groceries and sightseeing trips may be taken by air.
An industry of robots, working day and night, creating utility.
Become a member and live the dream with us.
Click HERE (Limited Seed Round)
The first 1000 Members get a huge 30% bonus!
Pure demand driven utility with a decades long growth horizon.
An entire industry driving down the cost of housing while protecting our environment.
Utility?
Robots never sleep...
Memberships are limited.
(click Here to buy memberships)
I need your valued opinions about our intro for our "Seed Round". What do you think about it? Trying to figure out, if we are missing anything.
Q: Since when... has a blockchain token been supported
by an $11 Trillion Dollar World Industry?
A: Since now…
Imagine yourself living in a beautiful smart home with mobile walls, interior gardens, pools, clean healthy air and intelligent security.
Built by giant robotic drones and heated by solar powered data furnaces.
A home that pays your bills while you sleep.
No worries about fires, hurricanes, water damage or theft.
Groceries and sightseeing trips may be taken by air.
An industry of robots, working day and night, creating utility.
Become a member and live the dream with us.
Click HERE (Limited Seed Round)
The first 1000 Members get a huge 30% bonus!
Pure demand driven utility with a decades long growth horizon.
An entire industry driving down the cost of housing while protecting our environment.
Utility?
Robots never sleep...
Memberships are limited.
(click Here to buy memberships)
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