Constructive criticism: If you're going to devote entire stanzas to single words, make sure those words are damn compelling.
I always have found that snakes try to move out of the way of the incoming boot. 
Topic: This is not my country - page 2. (Read 3102 times)
So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast.
You mean near the Potomac?
Yup, some very dangerous vipers on the shores of the Potomac.
So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast.
You mean near the Potomac?
So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast.
So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
So... what you're saying is you're the snake?
not quite
When the boot crushed the snake's head, the other boots came out on the street: from them I hide and fear that this is no longer my country.
So... what you're saying is you're the snake?
Boot’s
Black shadow hovers over
Head
Twenty-six-point-five
Till the snake’s head
Blood
Running droplets stream
Out the neck
River
The boot on the snake’s head
The black boots on the sidewalk
Door to door
Street to street
House to house
No where to run
Just hope they don’t come inside
Close the windows
Close the doors
Cover your ears
Close your eyes
Repeat after me
This is not my country
This is not my country
This is not my country
Black shadow hovers over
Head
Twenty-six-point-five
Till the snake’s head
Blood
Running droplets stream
Out the neck
River
The boot on the snake’s head
The black boots on the sidewalk
Door to door
Street to street
House to house
No where to run
Just hope they don’t come inside
Close the windows
Close the doors
Cover your ears
Close your eyes
Repeat after me
This is not my country
This is not my country
This is not my country
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