Hello devs, hello everyone,
I just read the initial white paper, which is currently under revision.
First of all, congratulations. I know, that it is quite some effort to put something like this together. However, as many already mentioned, there are a few points, which could be improved. When looking at the original ETH whitepaper (
https://github.com/ethereum/wiki/wiki/White-Paper), you see, that there are 92 revision. Hence, something like this is also a work in progress.
Just a few points:
- Pictures: If you use pictures, one should give credit, from where you got them. Furthermore, many pictures did not contribute to the content of the white paper. Even thought, this looks nice, I would rather drop them and add more figures or tables, which will add additional information to the paper.
- Add references, if you cite or reference to a statement, it is good to give the source.
- Add technical aspects: As there are planned features such as coin swap, masternodes or anonymity, I would add more detailed technical descriptions to the paper, if possible.
- A minor thing, but I would use a more "serious" font like Times New Roman.
Furthermore, there seems to be small mistake:
"The target is to ensure that there are around 50,000 masternodes in the system within one year after the third phase is launched."
As a masternode requires 1000 coins and the maximum coin supply will be only 4,2 million coins, this is not possible (50,000*1000=50 million).
Looking forward to the revision. Kind regards,
Halcyon D.
. i can't join telegram group..its says group not found. i try it on desktop & web same error. 
Waiting more update from you. hope this project can over eth and have many thing eth can't do 
