can you check English grammar please

jackg

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I think it should be:

"Bitcoin, for the current financial world, is like a deep breath after entering the top of the mountain."

I'm from England, that's how we learn it anyway.

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Bitcoin is like a deep breath after entering the top of the mountain.

That is the main caluse of the sentence, as you can tell it can stand alone.

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for the current financial world

We can then embed this subordinate clause that doesn't make sens on is own, but in the sentence, it fits well.

mothermother

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Thank you

BitcoinsGreat

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Thank you to tell me about it, actually i really don't know Bitcoin's mean.

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Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 06:42:34 AM

As in topic - can someone with high English skills check grammar in this quote:

"Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath, after entering the top of the mountain."

"For the current financial world, Bitcoin is like having a deep breath after arriving on the top of the mountain".

Just trying if it makes sense.

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Quote from: notbatman on March 04, 2016, 05:49:58 PM

Quote from: Gleb Gamow on March 04, 2016, 04:39:39 PM

Quote from: notbatman on March 04, 2016, 03:17:55 PM

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 06:42:34 AM

As in topic - can someone with high English skills check grammar in this quote:

"Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath, after entering the top of the mountain."

I think this works:

"Bitcoin is a deep breath of fresh air from the top of a mountain for the current financial world"

However, I might write the following for more tactility:

"Bitcoin is like the fresh air taken in a deep breath after reaching the summit of a Himalayan mountain to our current financial world."

Doggerel much?

Doggerel Haiku:

   Orange Bitcoin
   Honey Badger Attack
   HODL!

How's that for a first attempt?

Haiku was my first choice, but upon Googling...

BTW, you're missing two syllables.

   Orange Blossom Bitcoins
   Honey Badgers Attack
   HODL!

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Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 10:55:31 AM

Quote from: Bitguybillionaire on March 04, 2016, 10:24:16 AM

Those commas don't need to be there. Commas are mostly used for conjunction sentences, before words like and or but, so there is no need for them there even if you want the reader to read it slowly.

I think comma before word Bitcoin is ok.

It's not just okay, it's mandatory. "For the current financial world" is a non-restrictive clause (you can remove it without changing the meaning of the rest of the sentence), so it must be separated with commas.

Quote from: Gleb Gamow on March 04, 2016, 01:49:51 PM

Is it "You're always welcome!" or "Your always welcome!"? (think: Your Welcome.)

Think: "My welcome!" (sentence fragment) or "I am welcome!"?

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Quote from: Gleb Gamow on March 04, 2016, 04:39:39 PM

Quote from: notbatman on March 04, 2016, 03:17:55 PM

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 06:42:34 AM

As in topic - can someone with high English skills check grammar in this quote:

"Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath, after entering the top of the mountain."

I think this works:

"Bitcoin is a deep breath of fresh air from the top of a mountain for the current financial world"

However, I might write the following for more tactility:

"Bitcoin is like the fresh air taken in a deep breath after reaching the summit of a Himalayan mountain to our current financial world."

Doggerel much?

Doggerel Haiku:

Orange Bitcoin
Honey Badger Attack
HODL!

How's that for a first attempt?

Gleb Gamow

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Quote from: notbatman on March 04, 2016, 03:17:55 PM

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 06:42:34 AM

As in topic - can someone with high English skills check grammar in this quote:

"Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath, after entering the top of the mountain."

I think this works:

"Bitcoin is a deep breath of fresh air from the top of a mountain for the current financial world"

However, I might write the following for more tactility:

"Bitcoin is like the fresh air taken in a deep breath after reaching the summit of a Himalayan mountain to our current financial world."

Doggerel much?

abhishek.g

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Instead of reaching you can say , after reaching at the top ...

Entering is not a valid word here as explained in above posts .

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Been wanting to touch up on my grammar and how I write. Do any of you have suggestions of sites to practice the basics and develop from there? Drives a bit wonky when I look at lines of spew and no real control of what I am stating.

Maybe Lynda or the Khann institute as examples.

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"Common rogue from Russia with a bare ass."

That sux ^^^ Wink

How about

The financial Bitcoin world is a mountain top with no current fresh air to breathe. Derp.

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Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 06:42:34 AM

As in topic - can someone with high English skills check grammar in this quote:

"Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath, after entering the top of the mountain."

I think this works:

"Bitcoin is a deep breath of fresh air from the top of a mountain for the current financial world"

However, I might write the following for more tactility:

"Bitcoin is like the fresh air taken in a deep breath after reaching the summit of a Himalayan mountain to our current financial world."

Gleb Gamow

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Quote from: Foxpup on March 04, 2016, 08:00:17 AM

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:29:31 AM

Thank you very much!

You are magician!

Tip sent! Wink

You're always welcome! Grin

Quote from: Lutpin on March 04, 2016, 07:43:19 AM

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:42:03 AM

Followers

Users that follow the specific account.

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:42:03 AM

Followings

Users the specific account is following, or to put it in other words, those users the account is a follower of.

I was going to say that, but I can't type so fast.

Is it "You're always welcome!" or "Your always welcome!"? (think: Your Welcome.)

kotwica666

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Quote from: Bitguybillionaire on March 04, 2016, 10:24:16 AM

Those commas don't need to be there. Commas are mostly used for conjunction sentences, before words like and or but, so there is no need for them there even if you want the reader to read it slowly.

I think comma before word Bitcoin is ok. When i read that, little break in this moment sounds good to me

Bitguybillionaire

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Those commas don't need to be there. Commas are mostly used for conjunction sentences, before words like and or but, so there is no need for them there even if you want the reader to read it slowly.

Foxpup

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Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:29:31 AM

Thank you very much!

You are magician!

Tip sent! Wink

You're always welcome! Grin

Quote from: Lutpin on March 04, 2016, 07:43:19 AM

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:42:03 AM

Followers

Users that follow the specific account.

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:42:03 AM

Followings

Users the specific account is following, or to put it in other words, those users the account is a follower of.

I was going to say that, but I can't type so fast.

kotwica666

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Quote from: Lutpin on March 04, 2016, 07:43:19 AM

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:42:03 AM

Followers

Users that follow the specific account.

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:42:03 AM

Followings

Users the specific account is following, or to put it in other words, those users the account is a follower of.

Thank you Lutpin. I was not sure if it means that "is already following" or "will be following".

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Goodbye, Z.

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:42:03 AM

Followers

Users that follow the specific account.

Quote from: kotwica666 on March 04, 2016, 07:42:03 AM

Followings

Users the specific account is following, or to put it in other words, those users the account is a follower of.

kotwica666

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Oh can i have one more little question?

Followers
Followings
(it's about twitter)
Followers thats are thoes people who are watching me.
But Followings?

kotwica666

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Thank you very much!

You are magician!

Tip sent! Wink

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