The first clause is has a misplaced comma, and the word order is awkward.
Incorrect: "Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath..."
Correct but awkward: "Bitcoin, for the current financial world, is like a deep breath..."
Better: "For the current financial world, Bitcoin is like a deep breath..."
The last clause is grammatically correct, but "entering" is the wrong word. To "enter" something means to go inside it, not on top of it. A better word would be "reaching".
There should be no comma before the last clause unless you mean that before reaching the top of the mountain, Bitcoin is not like a deep breath (which makes no sense).
Putting it all together:
"For the current financial world, Bitcoin is like a deep breath after reaching the top of the mountain."
Topic: can you check English grammar please - page 2. (Read 1057 times)
As in topic - can someone with high English skills check grammar in this quote:
"Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath, after entering the top of the mountain."
"Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath, after entering the top of the mountain."
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