Where do I start?
First of all there is no defence against abuse, except other members are prohibited to use force against me. If they get away with it (I can only defend myself, nobody else, and nobody else can defend me without breaching the second). The most worrying part is that there is no mention of relations to other societies. There are also no mention of limits to defence. It may end up like some sick cult where the members think they are allowed to kill people in "self defence" for the simplest offences.
Hmm.... I think you need to re-read it:
no individual or association of individuals, however constituted, has the right to initiate force against any other individual
Defending someone is by definition not initiating force.
And proportional force is the accepted definition of "self defense".
At least there won't be any illegal copying by this law. If I copy some copyrighted work, the only punishment would be copying the work back from me!
And if you don't know for sure who did it, you are lost. Nobody has the authority to take a suspect in for questioning or to investigate anything on other people's property.
I can see you want to legalize drunk driving.
Small children and people without the mental capability of signing a contract have no way to defend themselves. If someone attacks my two year old son without attacking me, I have no right of initiating any kind of force against the offending individual to save my own son. If I do, the attacker has the right of self defence by unspecified means. No, I wouldn't dream of signing this contract.
Let's do this again:
no individual or association of individuals, however constituted, has the right to initiate force against any other individual
Defending someone is by definition not initiating force.
Self-defence is defined as defending one self, not defending other people, but the definition of this will probably vary. It certainly needs some clarification. Clarification could be done by courts, but you don't want it. At least not one authoritative court.
You have no right by your contract to delegate the ability to defend yourself. It belongs to the individual. Your defenders can't initiate force against my police. Only defend themselves. Assuming they belong to the same society as you, but they will likely not. They can make up their own contracts. My police will certainly go directly for you and throw you before court and then in prison.
And once more 'round:
no individual or association of individuals, however constituted, has the right to initiate force against any other individual
Defending someone is by definition not initiating force.
Defending someone else is by definition not self-defence.
My society will be explicitly against dealing with so-called defence agencies. We will have a secret group responsible for poisoning their water supplies with psychedelic drugs, hopefully keeping them out of business. We don't want South African conditions.
That
is initiating force, and will, if anything,
bring about the conditions that (you say) you are trying to avoid.
No. The situation I want to avoid is a lot of "defence" and "security" agencies, or criminals with weapons, and street gangs (it's pretty much the same), walking around and making the society unsafe for all other people than their customers. My society will have a definitive prohibition against such agencies, with long prison terms for affiliation.
They are not above the law. The law, and the fact that the majority of the society backs the law, makes the actions moral. What do you think you are above the law?
On the contrary, I am not above the law, and neither are they. If an action is immoral if I do it, it is immoral if they do it.
When executing government authority they have the obligation according to the law, which a majority of the society agrees on, to act in this way. This makes the actions moral when they do it, and immoral if you do it. I think it is very sensible to limit those powers to a small well controlled group.
The great and chief end, therefore, of men's uniting into commonwealths, and putting themselves under government, is the preservation of their property. To which in the state of nature there are many things wanting.
To which I respond:
First, There wants an established, settled, known law, received and allowed by common consent to be the standard of right and wrong, and the common measure to decide all controversies between them: for though the law of nature be plain and intelligible to all rational creatures; yet men being biassed by their interest, as well as ignorant for want of study of it, are not apt to allow of it as a law binding to them in the application of it to their particular cases.
Law does not need government. In fact, a free market in arbitration will produce the best law for all involved.
This is basically what is done now, yes? Democracy and all. John Locke never intended everyone to sign every law. There were customary laws long before governments. The laws where usually not written down, yet one would get punished for breaking them. After describing the law of nature, he described why governments will come into being as a natural next step.
Secondly, In the state of nature there wants a known and indifferent judge, with authority to determine all differences according to the established law: for every one in that state being both judge and executioner of the law of nature, men being partial to themselves, passion and revenge is very apt to carry them too far, and with too much heat, in their own cases; as well as negligence, and unconcernedness, to make them too remiss in other men's.
Likewise, placing the power of judgment in the hands of the Market will best produce fairness and impartiality. Giving that power to the group who claims to be wronged will not result in an indifferent judge, indeed quite the opposite.
This does not make sense. The market has no incentives for using an indifferent judge. I would pay for the cheapest judge to judge in my favor. The market will not guarantee a division of power either, which was important to Locke.
Thirdly, In the state of nature there often wants power to back and support the sentence when right, and to give it due execution, They who by any injustice offended, will seldom fail, where they are able, by force to make good their injustice; such resistance many times makes the punishment dangerous, and frequently destructive, to those who attempt it.
Once again, the Market is the answer. For financial crimes, restitution. For violent offenses, the defense is often sufficient to punish the offender.
Your society does not mention restitution! And the point of punishing people for crimes is (in most countries, probably not yours with it's insane amount of prisoners per capita) not the punishment itself, but to give them education and guiding back to society as a normal law-abiding citizens. Focus on punishment only brings us back to medieval times. Hurting people physically will not accomplish anything but revenge. We also have the case of mentally ill people who need treatment. Punishment will only make them worse.
Another day.