COOL! time for a global promotion!
oh btw, spelling mistake at the ending --> its "receive". not "recive". quick fix it
Just to round up all the changes so that it will be easier.
'IMPROVEMENT's are those that really needs to be changed.
'SUGGESTION's are those that i am simply just suggesting. Purely optional as my English isn't Perfect...didn't scored As in schools for it.
At 0:13
ORIGINAL: "...recieve..."
IMPROVEMENT: "...receive..."
REASON: Spelling mistake
At 0:27
ORIGINAL: "People from all industries, walks of life and skillsets" and "can benefit from what Digibyte offers."
SUGGESTION: "People from all industries, skillsets and walks of life" and "can benefit from what Digibyte has to offer."
REASON: based on my English Knowledge, i just thought it sounds better and more fluid sentence-structure wise. that's all.
At 0:48
ORIGINAL: "People all over the world are beginning to see & utilize the potential digital money offers." and "Don't let this new wave of technology pass you by."
SUGGESTION: "People all over the world are beginning to see & utilize the potential that digital money has to offer." and "Don't let this new wave of technology pass by you."
REASON: same as 0:27.
At 0:57
ORIGINAL: "...recive..."
IMPROVEMENT: "...receive..."
REASON: Spelling mistake
In addition, i am not sure if its for the best but is it better to remove all the "."? i am referring to the fullstops. As i watched the video, some had it and some didn't. it does look better...visually without them. But i am not sure if its a sensible/logical thing to do. haha...
just to round up other people's posts for your convenience
Thanks for your effort and work. Good Job!
I think, the language can be formalized a bit more, especially, at: 0.35 secs, like "you can either purchase DGB from exchanges or mine.... etc..", in general, language can be improved in a more formal way. This is really important, implying that how serious DGB is and can take the attention of serious investors.
Also again at at: 0.35 secs, since we give mining information, in the next frame, explain how to mine and mention the security of DGB with that 5 mining algorithms, for example, each algorithm can be circularized around DGB logo.
And I agree that music is a bit disturbing, it could have been better.
Thank you. Regards,